In the planet blade who have 6 people. This people divided in 2 families. This world has a problem. This world are dark and the sun are not hear! this world need one solution.A man of the family Fox, has a power. His power consist in collecting the sand and the water of this world. this power are match hard.This man has a one talent. He have many agility. Hi have the possible heroe. The family of them didn't trust whit him.
One day the families were boring, because nothing has sun, and the sun is important. He iluminate! the men of the family Fox, think ''¿ How can't you help?''. He remember, The men of his family have a power and agility. Them the other integrants of family Fox, Said to him '' You can't do', is so difficult''. The were to terribly dissapinted.
He tome hope, before he was going to show the family that I could trust him. He got up and used their power. He did hands up and laugh. The sand and the water when to the men. This take a big ball of water and sandy coater. He throw to sky, before he jump in the wall of edificies of this world and go to the sun, He touch this break the maldition.
THE END!
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ResponderEliminarCorrect the spelling and structures because this is not clear like that. The story is good but you can imporve it. The introduction is in one paragraph and there is not a climax. You can make it!
ResponderEliminarI like your story but there are parts that i don't understand.
ResponderEliminarSome words are wrong. I can´t understand some parts because the structure of the text is not clear. you can improved the grammar and the spelling. You are a creative man you could do better.
ResponderEliminarheyyyy Guillo!
ResponderEliminarit was so good your imagination but , it was in some parts confuse but i like the story and i like the finish.
jajaja its free.... ok i like your story, there are some wrong words but you made a great story,... you could make it longer but is good.
ResponderEliminarCongrats!
are some spelling errors in English is not used ¿ , but you and I like that have pictures,is longer and the story is interesting but in some pars i don't understand because is confusing
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